*NEW* POETS CORNER

[spiralxstatic]

i like that one, especially at the beginning. I hope its mostly ficticous though, its christmas!

[spiralxstatic]

at this time of night
only the lonely sit up
my hand writes words
to fill the void you left
but they cannot hope to fill
the distance between us
the distance in your voice.

[theatrics]

I think that is one of your best peices, the shortness of it works I hope it's not true either as it's christmas Spiral lol.
This poem seems like there is a story behind it? Like the bus one perhaps?

[spiralxstatic]

I suppose its about when my last relationship was failing, and I ended up awake very late writing on most nights.

I love writing about that girl on the bus, she'd probably find it incredibly weird.

[spiralxstatic]

the first line contradicts the entireity of it, but its still very good.

Id like you to write about something else though, to see what comes out, it always seems to be very similar topics?

we've waited, hoped, dreaded
too many legs under the table
you've avoided my eye all night
but now we're accidentally sat
side by side
legs and waist pushed together
i hear you breath quiver as you
breathe in.
we said we'd avoid this situation at all costs
but now we're already there
your hand is in mine
under the table, away from prying eyes
as long as it doesnt go too far
the snow and the stars create an atmosphere
far too romantic
you share my warmth, my taxi, my bed.

[theatrics]

Well I just won't post them on here anymore then lol.
Its the same topi that I think about when I am upset I guess.
I can't write when I am happy so.

[spiralxstatic]

Dec 23, 2010 23:31:21 GMT theatrics said:

Well I just won't post them on here anymore then lol.
Its the same topi that I think about when I am upset I guess.
I can't write when I am happy so.

no no dont stop posting on here, I didnt mean to offend, I was just saying I think they would be as good as what you write now.

[theatrics]

Well I understand your criticism. I do write about the same thing sometimes (evidently) for months on end but it does change after a while, so I suppose you've merely kick started the process.

I don't write good stuff Spiral what are you on?! It's ghastly. lol I like your newest- it seems nearly "adulterous", like it isn't allowed? In which case I highly applaud.

[spiralxstatic]

Dec 23, 2010 23:40:48 GMT theatrics said:

Well I understand your criticism. I do write about the same thing sometimes (evidently) for months on end but it does change after a while, so I suppose you've merely kick started the process.

I don't write good stuff Spiral what are you on?! It's ghastly. lol I like your newest- it seems nearly "adulterous", like it isn't allowed? In which case I highly applaud.

it was NOT criticism, it was just an idea i love what you write.

also, im glad you picked up on the adulterous theme, i wasnt sure if it had come accross. but dont applaud, nothing happened, im a good boy.

[theatrics]

Well holding hands under the table is not exactly nothing is it "good boy"?

[spiralxstatic]

thats true, but I didnt take her home like the poem insinuates.

edit: you didnt need to delete your poem !

[theatrics]

This is a different topic, just for you Spiral haha

What happened to the fable,
The princess in the castle?
The prince charming come to save her.
The fairytales of old.
Dead.
I picture burnt forest,
Flowers that crumble in your hands.
Leaves as dry as an old hag’s heart.
Blackening.
Prince charming never comes.
The big strong ape
Who came to save her
Attention slipped to another pair of tits.
His pledge of love ran away with his testicles.
This prince charming never existed.
Instead we see an un-enchanted forest
Filled with disappointment.
Reality is no fairytale.
Fairytales are happy.

[spiralxstatic]

thats really good, but, I feel like I have angered you, I hope not.

[theatrics]

No, it may be upset me because of the realisation that my writing was turning into one dimensional, theme wise anyway. Bar the poem about art and Gogh etc. I am not mad I am thankful someone made me realise it. That last poem is just angry not aimed at anyone lol.

[spiralxstatic]

oh I know the poem wasnt, but you seem mad otherwise. but anyway, glad to hear it.