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[Exo-Happiness]

"The reasons behind most good in life,
Seek refuge in a distant lie"

This line is my favourite.
It's so deep. That poem I think is my favourite of yours!
It really is great. I just love the ambiguity of who this other person is. To me it's like probably a girl. But also maybe the subconscience of the poem's subject. I don't know what it is really. but it is such a good poem.

[sirmavers]

Aug 26, 2009 18:14:14 GMT Exo-Happiness said:

"The reasons behind most good in life,
Seek refuge in a distant lie"

This line is my favourite.
It's so deep. That poem I think is my favourite of yours!
It really is great. I just love the ambiguity of who this other person is. To me it's like probably a girl. But also maybe the subconscience of the poem's subject. I don't know what it is really. but it is such a good poem.

Never really thought about individual lines, but yeh that's a top line In all honesty I can't remember 100% who it was about, probably right, but it's likely that I just write it in a spontanious manner just in hope it would come out good. It really could be anyone, someone important, it was about someone who gives me reason for doing something. Will have to think about it, really not 100% who it is. This one does grow on me every time, it's part way to the perfection I was looking for, it has genius lines but still not sure who or what it's about :/

[Exo-Happiness]

Meaningful abstract...? :/

The castform swims the fold
That lies between the bands
The lines dividing corn and sheds
Watches tell the acorn lands

Strings to your bow of month
Monsters surf the rising grass
Chains of trees grip their eyes
Futuristic victors watch them pass

The bodies feed the roots of hearts
Rainbows shield hate from the seas
Covers bring light to stars
As daisies surrender to the bees.

[sirmavers]

I liek that, though I did have to think, and generally that is a good sign, but thinking sometimes frustrates me. Last 4 lines are great, I write a poem about daisies once, which was pretty special and probably my favourite. But though the thinking wound me up a little I did enjoy that

[Exo-Happiness]

Haha. Yeah. I can't remember when I wrote it. You've got me looking back through all my old stuff. So of it is unbelievably shit!! haha. xx

[sirmavers]

I've only got like 80 on my PC now, looking back at the stuff I lost on my laptop and the stuff I got rid of when I had a clear out it's quite embarrasing. I actually feel sick thinking about them, and rather frustrated as to why the hell I write them :/ Like looking back at old stuff though, because few weeks back I posted on here one that I did in March, the start of my new stuff basically, it was about love loss and taking it to far but it was really funny and in general top stuff. Can inspire new ideas aswell when you look back.

PS. Luke, I think that we now have enough regular poets on here to make a fantastic 4 lolz, if bloody scruff ever resurrects himself. Top stuff.

[Sean]

So I'm guessing one of you two are going to win that competition. . . aha

[dontask]

ant picks so its gonna be exohappiness. n she deserves it for bringing me a muse friend

[sirmavers]

I can't to comp, I'm running it. Got an entry from Luke, not giving an opinion on it here, but I'd best get one off 'exohappiness' after this introduction Much look forward to it...

[sirmavers]

I've just done this, really spoiles the pattern of good poems, but I find it funny. Makes sense at first bt the whole thing is about nonsense and the things that go through my head when people are trying to send me mad

So you thought I walked through life,
Hakuna matata,
You sit and drink white wine,
Well your well being doesn’t matter,
Flattery can kill,
Well guess I’m already dead,
Don’t tell me these lies I don’t want to hear them,
Or my hands will soon be covered in red,
Turn the screw with your withered hands,
You’re never too old to bring me down,
I’ve escaped your trap once again,
I’ve got away alive and I don’t know how,
The blinds in your kitchen are drawn,
As you cook up another disaster,
You misinterpret the whole fiasco for genius,
And you don’t feel a fool until the morning after,
Don’t over anticipate your plans,
Because I’ve got a trick or two up my sleeves,
I’ll roll them up tight I’m up for a fight,
With your poison and dirty disease,
I taste the savoy truffle,
And I can smell the warm magic pie,
Revolution number 9 is on its way,
I can see nonsense in everyone’s eyes,
I see I’m not on my own feeling putrid,
I feel nonsense is the only path left,
Use these words and keep them in your mind,
Because when you lose it it’ll be all you’ve got left.

[dontask]

official cry for help: have to write a poem for my girlfriend for her birthday, all optimistic etc but im not feeling very optimistic for complicated reasons. ant, exo, please help.

[sirmavers]

Would you like me or exo to write a poem for you, are you crying to the experts for help I can look through some stuff now and see what I can find, but you know me, nonsense and pessimism. Shall look now...

[Exo-Happiness]

I'm working on the two faced poem. I have an idea. Which i think could be cool if i can get it to work. Best make it rhyme if Ant is judging!

And Spiral Static (Which btw... Is a Brill!! song. ) You want it to be a love poem? Or just a happy poem?

[dontask]

i dunno start me off or something, i was dead ready towrite it n then she pissed me off n now i cant make myself do it at all. any help from exo appreciated too

love poem exo i can set the scene abit if you like?

[Exo-Happiness]

I dunno really. It's kinda hard when you don't feel it yourself I guess. If that makes sense. Like a lot of the stuff I write is inspired by personal feelings. I was just thinking about writing one for someone though. Give me a sec, I'll see if I can help you out.